Yeah...
Don't jump the gun and call em a hater. But you need to work on your flow. Its slow and has no rythm. Though the beats you use are pretty G sometimes.
Ok so im tryin 2 upload a rerecorded version of the track and newgrounds is being gay and just keeping the old file... here's the info from the old version:
Deeper (Diss)
Author
Davidas Kolkinas (Broken-Needle)
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Date Submitted
02/10/2009 | 12:01AM EST
File Information
Hip Hop - Modern Song | 2.1 MB | 1 min 31 sec
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Current Score
3.32 / 5.00
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AUTHOR COMMENTS
Ok so I apologize once again for not putting time into this shit, but I put it w.e I had 2 spare at least 4 today... I need new beats..... oh and this a diss to KoldKane's wanna b's... beat by G-J-R AKA DjTechnique "Deeper"
Yall wont win day u c a flying copper(pigs can fly... for you dip shits)
fuck it bring ya chopper
This how u kill em proper
Have it your way bacon whopper
say ma name son I one
Yall done days young
point that 50 we c yall
twin towers again fall
place a date only 1 call
Locked in ma pen after all
Yall dont exist till ink spill
Aquired out that needle ill
Imuno deficiency syndrome kill
jack these fools like they jill
Son what dread locks?
who u dissin pops?
Find Jesus like cellblocks
You dogs bellong on catwalks
Soulja boy wanna b
Murda me i kill u hands free
Rappin headsets like a skully
Hit ya glass no half ass son fully
Yeah...
Don't jump the gun and call em a hater. But you need to work on your flow. Its slow and has no rythm. Though the beats you use are pretty G sometimes.
lol, I like this oldie tho ye flow is way off but still I like the lyrics n such=) n ye beat selection i'd pat myself on the back=)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.