It has a very nifty feel to it when the "music" actually kicks in.
The intro gets to be a bit much, but it is not unbearable.
I think that this could definitely be expanded vertically. More instruments should definitely be added. You also would benefit from some harmonies. That would give the song a lot more color, and a rich, fuller sound.
I do like how you brought the "noise" back in halfway through for a section. And the it dropped back out when the one melody line kicked back in. That was actually a pretty good effect.
From your comment above it seems like you weren't really trying to come up with a masterpiece here. But I still think you could have done more with it.
2/5 and 3/10 overall. Not a bad start, but you should definitely keep working on it. I hear potential.