Woahhhh, your really talented man! I heard something about you writing this first on the demo? Is this only your first submissions/songs? If so, keep going you could be reallllly talented!
You only missed out on the last star because of a few weird transitions here or there - specially the one at the start from the soft slow music to the hard drum beats, and also around 2:30-3 i found there was a few odd notes.
Thanks! Uhh, well no lol. I've submitted several tracks, some generating success, others not so much : / But yeah. I've been kind of in a weird toss between writing industrial music, and writing metal. I originally wrote this one on the demo yeah. It's posted on here actually if you want to compare. Titled Chaos pt. 1: Sea of Destruction.
I understand what you're saying about the transitions. It's mainly due to the instruments I chose I think (I'm most likely going to take the Digi synth in the background out in the section you mentioned. I wanted something to kind of build up, but I see it's not working), but I know there are parts that could definitely be worked on more. The drum transition from the slow to the heavier section is definitely one of those.
Thanks again man!