It Needs Something
The song is hard to make into a SONG, because the original is only...what...like 45 sec. long?
But that aside, I felt there needed to be a defined beat. There was that ominous...ambiance...in the background, but that's not really the same. I like the idea of a flowing song (especially since this piece was made with the water element in mind), but it felt a little lacking. You did do well to get the melody down correctly.