forsaken war god will hear your cry.
It's great overall
It just needs a few changes. As mentioned below, use a real guitar. Also (this isn't necessary) add some vocals if you can. Some quiet, foreboding lyrics could really do this song justice.
I agree with TheMANofSTEEL on what he said about the guitar rifts. But this fake guitar rift was alright. It kind of reminded me of Rammstein for some reason. But yeah, it sounds like you put alot of time into it and it was pretty good. So keep up the good work.
Good but still needs a few touches
A very interesting song indeed. The piano and keyboard really do add a certain melodic (is that even a real word?) quality to it that I can definitely get into. This really is a good song overall. Now you said you wanted some advice on the guitar. Truthfully, Im not entirely sure I can really hear a guitar. If I could guess, I'd say you're using a guitar rhythym that is more than likely part of the software, which in turn leads me to give you an 8 instead of a 10. The fake guitar rifts just arent doing you any justice. You have this great melody with all these great elements but the lack of a real guitar is selling you short. The only real piece of advice I could give you is to put in a real guitar. Otherwise, I really like the song.
I could indeed tell that you put a lot of work into this, not just for its length but also it's style! I thought it was a great representation of the gothic style. While I'm not really fond of that, I can at least appreciate the work you put into making a similar sound. I think the style you were most trying to get was a mysterious and uneasy sound, which is what you made. I was impressed at how well you worked on the guitar (I couldn't even tell this was guitar). While I can't give any tips on guitar, may you show off your talent as much as possible.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.