gobbly
except for the part around 2:46 i think it had a nice beat excep for the sound of something...maybe it's intentinal im not sure but it sounds like static to me. For your first song i think it rocks! And i think you should work on it and do some other things. Just the fact that this is your first song is awesome because alot of people don't have the patients or creativity to do anything.. let alone have the courage to put it up for everyone to rag on... so PLEASE keep workin I like it alot. put a smile on my face :)