The intro is very intriguing. I love the overall mood it sets for the song. Very tasteful sir, very tasteful indeed.
I love it when the kit kicks in. Very slow and methodical groove you created. And the bells are a VERY nice touch. I love the mix you created. Nothing is too loud, but everything is heard easily. Perfect balance.
I love the fadeout. It is very appropriate for this song. Nicely done there.
Now I do think there is some room for improvement. but this is just my opinion, so take it or leave it as you will.
First, it is to short. Needs to be at least a minute or two longer. Because it is a slower methodical song, it takes longer to get thoughts processed. So you can't really convey an entire story/message in under two minutes. I'd say double it in length.
A chorus or two, and a bridge would really help lengthen it. Plus variations of the section that has the drums and bells in it would be pretty cool.
Also, I think there could be more instruments. Not so much now, but rather if you decided to lengthen it. Because there would be more of an opportunity for this to grow, and become a fuller sound overall.
Also, the one thing I am unsure about is the bass line, or if there really is one. It sounds to me that the strings are the bass line. That you are playing the tonic on the low strings as the bass line. Now it sounds fine as is, but if this ever became longer like I suggested, I would recommend a bass line.
I would say this is more of a loop than an actual song. Perfect length for a good loop, almost two minutes. It also has a very full sound. The one thing I love about it as a loop is how it grow in the beginning and dies out at the end. Something that is really hard to do in such a small time frame.
as a song I'd give it 2/5 and 5/10 overall. But as a loop 5/5 and 9/10 overall. So I'ma give ya a 4/5 and 8/10 overall. Because I hate giving low score to people who obviously work hard on their submissions. :-)
Best of luck on your future projects.
Your right about the whole thing. I layered two sets of strings to take the place of a bassline. It is short and just when it ends it should take of into a new set of ideas or grow. I guess you could say its a loop, but I'd say it's an unfinished song. A bassline would work if some of the string layers where removed. Thanks for the ideas. I really appreciate the feedback. Lot's of things that I was thinking...
! The drums rock...when they come in everything just falls into place...
Thanks tokolos. Keep doing what you do.
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