I'm seeing a very obvious occurrence with your songs so far. They are all very repetitive. I don't know if it's because your trying to make them too long or what it is. You may say that the poem has nothing to do with the song, but it's really not a bad mix. I think even just reading the poem in a sad voice while the music is playing might be a pretty decent mix. Maybe you should try playing around with vocals with this song and it may not be so noticeable with how repetitive it is. Also, the sound that happened right at the end of the song made me cring. :(
Overall - I wouldn't mind seeing how this would turn out with some simple vocals.
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