Not sure if this is the song you wanted me to check out, i'm assuming it is since it seems structured similar to mine. I think this is quite good, your progression and instrumentation is highly varied and never boring, and the melody is calm and soothing.
Really my only criticism is on the mix, your instruments that occupy the higher frequency range (the piano and some of the instruments near the end) are sitting too high in the mix. Either a good EQ pass or maybe some compression might go a long way to smoothing it out. You just need a better balance of low and high to fill the sound out a bit more, especially near the end where the piece picks up.
Good work, I enjoyed this, would make a nice accompaniment to an RPG game of some kind.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.