An wonderful aura of bewitchment and arousal surround the mystique of love and attraction... but can it be too much? It's a simple song I wrote up from spur of the moment feelings. Enjoy!
Lyrics:
Come towards me
Don't ignore me
Fall into blissful sleep
Bewitching whispers
Breath on your lips
You know I'm just here to please
Fingers feeling light
Tracing your silhouette
So fragile and soft
Our bodies on fire, yet chills run down our spines
Where did you go?
I want to be free and you know...
Where did you go?
I want to be free and you know that's me.
Champagne pouring
Eyes exploring
Effervescent delight
Touching nothing
Yet feeling something
Adventurous flicker of light
My body's on its own
Grazing your silhouette
With lips so inspired
Our bodies so tight, yet we flow and intertwine
Where did you go?
I want to be free and you know...
Where did you go?
I want to be free and you know that's me.
Oh that's me, baby it's me
Champagne pouring
Eyes exploring
Effervescence delight
Touching nothing
Yet feeling something
Adventurous flicker of light
Oh go on speaking
Going on speaking
About how you glow[x2]
Dude...
You got out of tune quite often. Especially in the high register. You should try to be smoother when making jumps. Also I felt that the guitars had a nice beat going, but the countermelody on a solo guitar felt a bit odd. Again, watch the high register. 3/5 6/10
Interesting
I like the lyrics, very poetic. I like the guitar on this, but doesn't sound very indie. It doesn't somewhat, but if you realy want to pull the full indie potential on this, i would give it a nice beat and something weird. The vocals aren't bad, but I would brush up on them a little. Overall, nice job.
Keep it up,
Realz (RF)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
ChiggerFruit 
