You got out of tune quite often. Especially in the high register. You should try to be smoother when making jumps. Also I felt that the guitars had a nice beat going, but the countermelody on a solo guitar felt a bit odd. Again, watch the high register. 3/5 6/10
I like the lyrics, very poetic. I like the guitar on this, but doesn't sound very indie. It doesn't somewhat, but if you realy want to pull the full indie potential on this, i would give it a nice beat and something weird. The vocals aren't bad, but I would brush up on them a little. Overall, nice job.
Keep it up,