not bad, could use some work
um, okay it's different... maybe i'm just not a hip-hop fan =/ i do like the piano riff (can you use riff when talking about a piano?) it fits the theme you were going for. i think that the percussion beats or synths like that (im not a composer and dont really know what you used) make it sound like a cut scene in a video game. not bad, but i think you may want to try a different genre to create the feeling of a nightmare. still a decent track =)