Learn some progressions! If you're like me who has started composing music without any background knowledge of music theory, which I also did not and sounds like you possibly might not have, then go and get some! Learning how chords resolve and create tension, learning how to build working harmonies and such all greatly add to any piece. Go learn some music theory! Otherwise, yes, good try, you're getting there.
Thanks for awesome review! :) I do have music experience, however not in composing, and yes I will be going to a music university this fall :) I hope to learn a great deal! Thanks again =)
Can barely hear anything. Please make your new sumbissions louder next time.