The review I promissed:)

First of all: You requested honesty in your newsbox, so I don't hope you hate me after this review:)

Hmmmm... I guess the sudden start is excused for the fact that this is a loop rather then a song, so I won't go into details with that. However, if you ARE going to make it into a song, I highly suggest that you make the intro a little more calm without the fast beat.

Anyway, the first hand impression of the drums is good. They get a little anoying in the long run though, and need some more variation. It mostly sounds like the song is around 30 minutes long, and have been repeated 3 times to make the song 1 minute and a few seconds long:S
The bassline gets anoying after a few listens, and it sounds like you hit the wrong notes some places in the song (for example at 0:03-0:04 and at 0:11 and so on)
It's simply to deep for my taste.
I also think I'll have to agree with the guy bellow, and say that it need more overdrive. You should also try n' split the bassline into smaller bits, and make it a little more rythim-ish , instead of making it "1 long conected bass", if you get what I'm saying:P It would add an interesting touch to the song.
The percussion is nice though. I really like the places where you stopped the percussion and then gently started it again slowly, as heard at 0:16 and at 0:34 again and so on. Nice details on that part.

The beat itself need to be more "punchy". It's simply to soft somehow:S

Oh well, I think that's about what I had to say:) I hope my review was able to help (if just a little), soooo... good lick with your future productions. I will try to check them out:)
Untill then, this song will have to do with a score of 5/10. It's not completely crap, but it's not perfect eather, so a score in the middle seems fair to me:)

Peace out, and happy mixing!

-Hellstick