as it seems i'm the only one who's loves this song, the beat was off a tad but it gets better. i'll give you credit for that
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No offense, this is my own opinion, but try again. The whole beat was messed up which ultimately ruins the song. It was as if two beats, one slow and one fast, were going at once and you tried to make a song. Make it flow more. You have the idea, just figure out how to make them work.
Good luck man.
Needs some work
This could go somewhere, but it would be better if it wasnt as repetitive. Mix it up a bit.
Back to the Basics
A couple things make this ineffective and, overall, boring. You don't build or break any tension with volume changes, break beats, or any actual texture in your song.
The back beat never changes, and isn't that creative to begin with.
The rhythm to your melody is off putting and generally not musical.
You should probably try taking some lessons in music theory or try to take examples from the work of others.
You've got the will, just not the experience yet to pull it all off.
I like the syle of this.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.