First off I have a question. Are the guitars real? Or generated? Because they don't sound very real. And that is a problem. I mean, if they aren't real, I won't hold that against you. Cause not everyone has the ability to record themselves playing. But if they are real, then you need to work on their sound a bit.
Now as for the song as a whole, I like it...To an extent. It is very in your face at times, and has nifty beats. Very electro/industrial kind of metal sound. Your kick is fucking awesome, I simply love that sound. But I do think you could expand on the drums a bit. Maybe add some cymbal stuff, because it doesn't sound like there is any.
As for the structure of the song, I really don't know what to say. It is kinda difficult to follow the structure because it doesn't vary much. Now I don't mean it doesn't vary in instruments and all. But rather musically. Because it seems like you switch off from one drum rhythm to another without any rhyme or reason. And like I said before, the guitars are rough. Extremely hard to follow them at all.
But i LOVE the overall wound you got as a whole. So I'ma give you a 4/5 and 7/10 overall. As weird and eccentric as this is, I really like it a lot. But it could use a lot of work. If you do any more work in the future let me know. I would like to hear the changes you made.
P.S. - This has been favorited. :-)