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This is a song I put together today.

Mellowish song. Constructive criticism appreciated.

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Not bad,But is lacking.

Its not a bad tune, but I find it lacking in some areas.The harmony with the two guitars in the beginning and later on didnt sound right to me.I just felt that the notes kinda clashed against eachother as if they were a half a note too sharp/flat etc.

That and I felt your solo had too many hammer ons.I think it would be better if you did some sliding and moved around for some variety.

But other than that, I gotta say that I liked the chords you used.They produce the majority of the 'mellow' of the song, so I wouldnt change them if you ever update the song in the future.

Well thats all I can say for this song.

As for you, keep practicing.You have potential.

InsertFunnyUserName responds:

I'll take this all into consideration. Thanks for the detailed review.

Not bad.

It could use some lyrics. And there's a long silence in the end. Overall not bad.


InsertFunnyUserName responds:

Oh damn, didn't notice the silence ;o


I agree with airelite on this one, your intro does take a really long time building up.

InsertFunnyUserName responds:


Thanks for the review.

It's ok

You need to add lyrics and I like how the song builds but it takes too long to build up. It's pretty good for your second entry though so I will pass it.

InsertFunnyUserName responds:

Yeah, I thought lyrics would make the song too complicated for its own good and that the parts wouldn't flow together and yeah, I see what you mean with the buildup.

Thanks for the review.

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Jan 2, 2009
5:17 PM EST
General Rock
File Info
5.2 MB
2 min 49 sec

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