well, for most songs, that max you wanna hold the same melody for is about 8 measure, or else it begans to get drawn out and seems a bit boring. Also, the melody you had in place her really didnt seem to grasp me that well. It seems like something thrown together, not too well organized, cause there's a real lack of bass for a significant length of the song, which is nearly comes in to the middle, but it really doesn't work well with the main melody. I know that you have a sense of being able to use chords, but you just need to add alot, and take out a bunch of stuff that doesnt fit with the song.
also, it seems like it's gets off beat for some reason, so work on that too.
gl in the future.
thanks for the constructive crit. i kinda get what you mean for the most of this, and i'll try and fix it up for the album release. thanks heaps :]
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