Great original piece.
Honestly, seeing as you didn't use loops here I'm very, very impressed. I'm always happy to hear such original material!! That really shows an enormous amount of talent compared to much of the other material I hear in this genre.
Even though it's simple, I love that kick beat you've got running. It really keeps the intensity going. The rest of your percussion works fantastically to this effect as well.
Now even though you didn't use loops, the melody does get a little repetitive before the end. It shouldn't be hard for you to appropriately tweak the notes at parts though. I was waiting for a key change, or something, for the last minute and a half of the song. Seriously with the talent you've obviously got you could get away with going nuts on that melody if you wanted to.
Stereo work was a little mild, but still appropriate for the genre. You've got a pretty good concept of what Industrial listeners are expecting when it comes to instruments. I enjoyed the flow of the song, and the variety and layering of the instruments kept this an interesting listen through most of it. It's also clean and smooth- not picking up any clipping, static, clicks or any other adverse audio issues. So you did a great job on that end too.
sick beat man
keep up the good work
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.