you make better music when you don't try too hard but alot of other poeple try really hard and suck worse than this
Not as bad as you think
You builded up suspense quite well, you just need to make like a really loud guitar to start at the apex. Then take that guitar and add other instruments and presto, you got a decent song! I still have seen worse and don't give up writing music. Just listen to good music (like on newgrounds) while you do random stuff, like homework.