Needs less repeat...
You tried your hand, but you're going to have to try harder to get the approval you desire.
- Try coming up with some more interesting beats, the overall beat was hardly anything special and it just repeated for a minute.
- Get some more piercing instruments instead of just muffled noise.
Not harsh at all, are we? The comments clearly state that it's a work in progress, and they also clearly state that I am in need of new instruments and sound samples. Try reading next time.
-- Also, I don't appreciate "Fortune Cookie" reviews. :/