the idea is cool
I like the style. try harder
the melody gets repetitive real quick, despite the fact that it's nice. also you should pan the echos to the left.
the percussion isn't bad, but 808/909 samples are cliche. you have yourself a decent start here, expand upon the melody, make variations and a chorus and you'll have yourself a decent track.
try to find or make a kick that fills more in. for this kind of style i prefer a bit low cutted kick with bass. hihats sounds like fl? :P try to find some sample packs;) me bought the Vengeance samples. should take a look at that one. good luck.
i like the slow
its rare to find a slow song like this kudos