Did you really?
I'm not sure what you think funk is, but I don't think I know anyone who would call this funk.
To the song... your percussion is very muffled, yet artificial sounding at the same time.
Your instrumentation feels random and is honestly a little annoying.
The song builds up to nothing and, as a result, resolves nothing.
There is honestly nothing that pulls this song up for me.
I kind of see what you're saying. But the jist of what you're saying is "I'm sorry, but I'm afraid this patient doesn't have a heart."
So it sounds like I need a new major idea to bring this piece together. I know what you're saying about the instrumentation. I'll change some of the patches. Though what would be generally a good combination of instruments?
I'll try to fix the drums. Honestly it's a demo, but I'm happy you're giving honest advise.
Not much to really say here..
I like what you're trying, but like Garn I don't feel like there's enough that happens. I'll admit I didn't listen to the whole thing, but I did skip through the song and as I did it sort of sounded like the piece wa looping with little changes. Change up the song a little bit here and there. Add a different instrument or something. Make it get loud, mess with the dynamics. I don't completely understand what you're trying but I do like it and I think it could work. You just need to keep experimenting. And lose some of the repetitiveness in the song. This isn't the type of song split to sections, use that to your advantages.
Keep at it.
I actually mean things to start ugly and unconstructed. The main attraction is supposed to be the hip hop drums, I think, that start around 30 seconds in.
Hm. "Variation." "Lose some of the repetitiveness." So far the consensus here is the song is stagnant? That doesn't sound impossible to over come. I suppose I can start by morphing the organ type thing probably.
sounded the same nearly throughout the entire song, try a bit more variation and set the beat to a more background area
Add variation. Sounds good. I'm going to have to follow up on what you're referring to when you say the beat (I suppose you mean not the drums?)