Omfg, not only are you a good writer, but your sense of humor is amazing!!! You are clearly the king of awesome!!!
I have to give you 10/10 for the begining. It blew my mind. I was almost hypnotized by how the story was brought to life. But, around halfway it began to ebb a little. I'm not sure if this is your fault or just a failure of the story. But, it definately had parts where it sagged. Then, thankfully, it picked up again around the end. So, like I said: Awesome work!
That was great, I loved your voiced rendition of my short story. You made it sound so much darker than it really is. But that's a good thing, really. Oh man, its awesome.
Oh and if anyone reads this review, you can ready my actual short story at, http://fgijonc.newgrounds.com/news/po st/236658 .
Thanks again man for doing this!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.