u should make a song out of that or i will.....mwahahahah
The intro was a bit tough for me to get into, but as you added more melody the song really picked up and became more enjoyable. The bass and lead mingled well together.
My only criticism is that the song as a whole sounds too broken up to me. That volume swell type-thing you used at around 1:00, and again throughout the song didn't seem to fit with the sceme of things.
Overall, I'd say you've got a nice beginning to something good here. Keep working at it!