Don't rate your own work.
This isn't very good. All of the low frequencies are distorting a little and they just sounds like random noise.
I can tell what type of atmosphere you're going for but I think you need add effects like panning and reeverb on some of the sounds.
Also, what's with that very long silence after around 2:20?
Oh, and don't rate your own work! It only makes other people vote it lower.
I don't know what's up with the long silence. I know it needs work, I'm still working on this. Primarily this is just experimental and I only submitted to get a feel of what people think.
OH, and I didn't rate my own work! Don't make assumptions, it only makes people think you're a bigger douchebag!