Good effort, but the song is a bit . . . predictable. Add a little more flat strings and making the drum a bit more dominant. You might want to add some fortes and pianos, and occasionally make the song faster/slower.
There are three main parts to the song, and there is a time signature and tempo change occurring during the third part (with the guitars and the piano), right before the end, so I disagree about that.
But I agree I could've fleshed it out a bit more. Although at the time, I wanted the album to be bleak and whatnot, I agree it's a bit all-over-the-place and lacks focus.
Thanks anyway for the post and the CC.