some of the sounds don't really sound well together, i didn't like the piano that you used and i can see where your trying to go in the song, not to be too harsh but i think the structure of the song wasn't done well or the intro. the drums were really weird and beginning ambientish noise wasnt very pleasing... otherwise i think this is a good attempt or maybe this fits in a different category?
Yeah I agree with all you said. Needs more work.
Thanks for your advise!