All right
It's pretty all right as songs go.
The opening string bit is nice. Slow, calm and tranquil and all that.
The main problem with it is that it's kinda boring, cos it's a riff and just keeps playing over and over.
The second bit is... interesting...
Weird, doesn't fit well with the song, and it's not very good either.
And, the drumming riffs. The entrance of them is a bit kind of "Oh... so there's drums now?"
Maybe put in a fill to introduce them, so they aren't such a shock when they kick in.
And, after the switch in the middle, i dunno what it is, maybe a dodgy loop or something with the synching, but it just sounds like the drums lost the beat a bar into the second half, and was trying desperately to catch up throughout the rest of the song.
It's a good first attempt, don't get me wrong. And I hope those pointers help a bit.
But, at the moment, I can't give you more than a 4
pnezzy 
