I've been following this...
and I see a lot of improvement. Yes, I keep track of some peoples work and I noticed the original tranced. Your first poster had it right. Keep it slow like the original one, then build on sounds until you hit a middle point, have a quiet sequence with a soft melody for a little, then blast it away with the fast tempo and overwhelming sounds. Just, nothing too overwhelming to where you can't tell what the song is anymore.
As for the drums and bass, whoever told you to turn that up so high was a bit wrong. I'd tune them down just a little, cause every time I hear the crash of the bass, it sounds like static is coming through my speakers, ya know that sound? It kinda ruins it for me.
And for the ending, I'd go either with a soft melodic end like you have now, or a hard booming end. Maybe you can try both and see which sounds better, but remember to see what other people like as well. It's the audience you want to draw in.
As a final note, I'd set a goal for 2 minutes. 3 minutes could drag it on far too long unless you plan on making a new beat to throw in so it's not monotonous.
Good luck. I'll be keeping track.
4/5 for a very good effort, and 9/10 for trying hard. Almost there.
Good, but seems rushed.
I like how you have constantly been fine tuning and tweaking your song to make it sound better every time. While it sounded good fast in the beginning, it seemed to lose its effect near the middle and the ending. You are better off with your original speed in my opinion. I think this song has the potential to become an exceptional song with more work on it.
I mentioned earlier that you should make the song longer. Where you think it ends, you could in fact keep it slow like that for a bit longer then progressively add more to build up some momentum and then finish it off with an overwhelming ending. I would love to see this become a 3 minute song because currently at the end, it leaves me wanting more and more. You are doing a great job, keep it up.
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I think I'll get it done, the thing is that the tempo makes it more of a techno song but I like it, hmm maybe in between 180 and 140 LoL
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Now in a less idiotic manner like most of the other people on youtube, that was great I liked the little riff in the back. It added a bit of flavor to it and style. Your doing great, keep it up.
Like both of them!
I like both of the songs but i think it does sound a lot better sped up. keep doin wat you do.
Hmm... Well there are mixed opinions, many PMs, so I think I will change the tempo throughout the song.
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