This is a good start to something very moving, here a few pointers on improving the technical side so as to support the musical side:
Add stereo-enhancing, reeverb, and delay effects - these will add a richer sound to the track. The piano is a bit dry and obviously computerized because it lacks these elements.
EQ - The track itself is very bright, compress the upper end of the sound spectrum and enhance the lower end. Make the kick louder
Finally, it feels very top heavy as there is no bass. If a bass was playing alongside the kick it would be much, much more powerful.
Oh, and to ensure a more appropriate listening audience, make sure the genre fits the song. For this I would have classified it as either hiphop or miscellaneous.
Keep it up!
About that: "Oh, and to ensure a more appropriate listening audience, make sure the genre fits the song. For this I would have classified it as either hiphop or miscellaneous."
Sorrys, I'm bad with that xD, I never know what genre are my song :S.
Thanks for the coments, I'm not english so I'll try to understand what are you saying to try to use it, actually I cant modify that song :/.
I know what you mean, by it comes from your inside. Music is a great way of revealing your feelings.
Yeah, art in general :).
Thanks for the coments -^_^-