First... Attempt

Author Comments

This is my first song, and i was just fooling around trying to figure out how to use everything. i used a lot of cutoff automation, so i probably overdid it. i know it's not the best, but it's my first.

suggestions on how to improve are welcome

If you want to use the song, just let me know what for.


Where's the snare?

Hi Dvorask,

If you put a cool snare at the 2 and 4 you've got yourself a great electro/disco track! But not bad at all for a first attempt, keep the good work up.

Dvorask responds:

yeah, this was my first song that i made my drums for ( i usually use a loop library, just for the drums though! ;) ) and so i kinda really under-did it. i need to really work on my drums ;)


You're very good at this it's pretty amazing considering it is your first try. I like your main synth(s) (even if it's more rhythmic than melodic), it has an nice drive to it. I wouldn't mind listening to more songs of this kind.
One thing that would've probably worked very well in this track is a more breakbeat-like groove, the 2 kicks per bar are simply too little, you could also double the number of kicks and make it a techno-track although I'd prefer the former.
The break needs some improvements, most people would expect the introduction of a new (main)melody at this point but you only give us a hint. Make the break longer and bigger :)

I'm looking forward to your 2. track, keep it up man

Dvorask responds:

Wow. thanks.

Thats a lot of good criticism and i'm glad you responded. Actually, the rating's a little better than i expected. I'll try to make the new ones a little better, and i agree about the kick. i should have put at leatst four in per bar.


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Credits & Info


4.00 / 5.00

Nov 8, 2008
11:01 PM EST
File Info
4.2 MB
3 min 3 sec

Licensing Terms

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