Where's the snare?
If you put a cool snare at the 2 and 4 you've got yourself a great electro/disco track! But not bad at all for a first attempt, keep the good work up.
yeah, this was my first song that i made my drums for ( i usually use a loop library, just for the drums though! ;) ) and so i kinda really under-did it. i need to really work on my drums ;)
You're very good at this it's pretty amazing considering it is your first try. I like your main synth(s) (even if it's more rhythmic than melodic), it has an nice drive to it. I wouldn't mind listening to more songs of this kind.
One thing that would've probably worked very well in this track is a more breakbeat-like groove, the 2 kicks per bar are simply too little, you could also double the number of kicks and make it a techno-track although I'd prefer the former.
The break needs some improvements, most people would expect the introduction of a new (main)melody at this point but you only give us a hint. Make the break longer and bigger :)
I'm looking forward to your 2. track, keep it up man
Thats a lot of good criticism and i'm glad you responded. Actually, the rating's a little better than i expected. I'll try to make the new ones a little better, and i agree about the kick. i should have put at leatst four in per bar.