This music is quite intresting and the delicate instruments really take this into another dimention
I think, that for song like that you need more delicate instruments and sounds, but this is my music opinon.
There are much noice from the instruments. I don't know your instruments and your virtual studio, but I recomend you to find limiter for cutting some noice from melody instrument. Melody part is too loud too, change the volume balance.
1:04 - 1:12 was realy good part.