I do see potential.
Some words of advice though: try to make the beat that you build your song around a bit more complex.
And Make the ambience match the beat too.
I'll throw you a courtesy 4 though.
This could do for some improvement.
Don't be afraid to use effects on your drums. Some of the synths start to hurt after a while for sure you may also want to EQ it a little better (change volumes on some of the instruments) Its a great concept however. Keep up the music making for sure though. I see potential!