If you reduce the noises, it will be better!
And this must be industrial, not video game! The FX is nice but the threshold sounds made it's bad!!
For a welcome back song, this one kicks royal ass man.
What I love in this song, is the hardcore drums, beat and rythm, all that hardcore together is splendid! Those drum beats at 00:17 are the kind that blow up, and I love that... What's kind of unusual for you is this kind of music, paragonx9ish, feel what I'm saying? But I love it, and we still manage to feel that Zajed touch to it, fantastic work on that.
To answer your feedback request, I certainly needs extending, but like this I think it kicks enough ass to consider it good, so, a little extension, but with that and a TINY bit of variation around the melody like that it won't sound too repetitive, the song is a little beauty.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.