There is a lot of ups and downs in this track.
+Really like the melody and nature sounding atmosphere in the beginning, sounds very promising
+Overall great ambience in here. I love the accompaniment parts and interesting pads, the backing was very nice. The choral parts progressed quite well.
-The piano line after the intro was pretty formless. The melody is a bit directionless, and has a pretty bland rhythm :S
-The sudden key change - I understand your morbid idea, but it just felt to abrupt and rough. The synths in the background where progressing really nice, and then this weird part comes in like BANG! I personally dont understand it, doesnt feel very fitting in here :S
-If you used a more authentic piano sound than FL keys it would do you wonders :P