good but...

it's a good song but the piano is not natural so it's not so beautiful

Interesting...

This is a good start, but you could definitely make it better.

First off, you should vary the melody a bit. It has no syncopation, which makes it become rather stale quickly. The notes are alright, but you really should vary it's flow and rhythmic structure a bit.

Also, the left hand should not play chords on the downbeat quite so much. I like chords, they are definitely a good idea. But you need to break them up, and add syncopation to them. Instead of just hitting them on the down beat, roll them. Or break them up in different patterns. Or at least have them hit on the offbeat every now and then.

The bass sounds pretty decent. It is hitting on the offbeat a bit throughout the song. Which helps a lot because it gives a little variation in the song. Just not quite enough. I do like the bass overall though. Nice ideas there.

The strings are also a nice touch. They add some color to this song that is needed. But they definitely need some reverb on them. I honestly don't hear any reverb on them, and that would really give them some color.

While you are at it, you should think about adding reverb to the piano. At least in the right hand. Will really soften it up a bit, and will add a new dimension to this song.

Overall though, this is a good start.

3/5 and 5/10 overall.

Best of luck on future projects bud!

-Gravey-

nice

keep up the good work