I'm not quite sure what this is. it could be a song but it doesn't have a "grip." i find the song too slow for anybodys real taste and i think that this could be done a lot better and more refined. i agree with FuzzHot23 but unlike him I'm not going to be an ass about it. this song can use a lot of work but i can def see that you have tallent. you need to add something that is going to grip your audience's attention, while listening to this i kept waiting for something to keep in interested and it never came and at the end i was left wanting more. maybe this just isn't my taste in music because i like a nice bass backbone if you know what i mean.
Another problen i see with this song is that the melody doesn't change at all. as a song that just seems lazy. i say add in some loops that will give the song a "personality." this song doesn't sound like you really put your heart into this.
now onto why i gave you a 3, its solely on the lyrics because in the song i feel like they are the only thing in this song that gives it heart. the problem with the lyrics would be that they are out of tune and to me they sound really pitchy. if you insist on making a song as slow as this then you need to have lyrics with no problems.
i think this song could be really good if you worked on it a lot more but as of now its not really that easy to listen to. go ahead and hate on this review but unlike the last low scorers i gave a reason for why i disliked it....
good luck in the future,
I thought it was pretty good, Overall it felt kind of like a pink floyd song. It sounds like its unfinished, and if you plan to go anywhere with it I would give that version a straight up 10. I can see a sort of light drum track with maybe a classical guitar, but KEEP IT UP! Don't worry about what the other commenters say, a big group of the NG people are pretty harsh, and not understanding.
the thing about singing
in songs is that NG goers either hate or like it, so it's risky territory.
personally, the tune you sang reminded me of "The Thanksgiving Song" by Adam Sandler, but whatever.
personally, this song isn't enough to gauge your voice on, but i guess i'd say when you hit the high notes, don't clench your throat tight, try and smooth your air and slow it down so you hit the notes without ruining your tone.
my ears are bleeding too
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