cool! but needs some work as you said.
You'd have to add a good steady beat to this and it would be good, have better volume rise in at the start and fade out the end with your synths and it would be improved, make your main synths have some more effects onto em, then this song would officially make it into my books as a true song. add a more pronounced bassline to it and you'll score 10's and 5's from all that listen and possibly crack the top 5. and thats it on my opinion for what could be done to this.....
wat program are you using to make those synths?!? they're crazy!
9.7/10 -incomplete as a song, but nice as what you said it was supossed to be,
5/5 just an idea, and it's decent but needs work, and i look forward to your
final version, and BTW could i remix this??
and now im off to review your other ideas and your completed song..
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.