I made this yesterday, it's pretty much me improvising as I record it and layer stuff, has a old school metallica feel. I added the drums and keyboard(hardly hearable) in FL studio. Hope you like it. Please review if you vote low, I actually care about opinions and I'll take good advice.
It's all about the timing (:
I like the metallica influence. I can hear it in the song. The timing is off, but that makes sense if you actually recorded it (nothing you can't fix). The guitar is pretty good but all the background music stays the same. change it up. (:
The timing is off because I go from a 6:4 rhythm to a 4:4, and i know its almost the same thing, but I cant cut a measure short in FL studio, so I have to start some patterns at weird times, and its kind of hard to match the different layers of the recording up, because since the rhythm changes from those 2 things, it doesnt evenly match up on the grid, so It becomes a pain in the ass. I don't think it's that badly off though, if I could record all parts at the same time, timing wouldn't be a problem really. The keyboard is actually off beat on purpose, it's what makes it sound creepy.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
The-Mercenary 
