Much improved! I love the direction your taking with this one. Couple thoughts:
1: Cymbals in the beginning? Seems kind of Random. Like you had no idea what should go there and just chose something.
2: At 1:23, the idea changes but the bass doesn't? Something to think about.
3: At 1:39, when the counter-melody comes in, it would be way cool if you could take the bass out entirely and throw in some ambient background like you do at 0:53
4: The ending lacks variety and is...predictable. Not necessarily a bad thing, but it could be better.
A little more work and this could be on the weekly top five. In my opinion
Thanks man, I appreciate it; I'll keep up the work.
not bad =] definitely an improvement, u got a nice en jumpy beat there, nice work
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