i had to laugh
is it sad that i can name most if not all of the tracks you are using... including the drum sequences xD.
anyway, you needed more variety in the actual rythm i did notice that you changed the actual notes once through out the whole song (rated you down a bit)
although you did use the same notes you did change the rythm of the notes (cheers to that)
Still i can't rate you below a 3 (my policy) because in all honesty it's not as bad as... my first trance AND a few others i have actually heard. It's higher than, in my opinion, some of the other first attempts.
Good job and hope to hear more from you in the future.
as long as it gets an average review score of over 7 i'm happy to be honest