The intro was good, but then the kick and the sounds got really confusing after 20 or so seconds. There was distortion on the kick, and didn't go well with the ears.
The melody was very unique, i'll give u that. It almost had a native american feel. The main synth after 1:22 was cool, had an interesting melody. I never really got into the song at any point.
I think you have potential. My advice would be to remake a song u really like, so u can figure a could pattern for a song overall. Once u really do well on a remake, then write ur own stuff using a similar pattern. This kind went into a bunch of different feels and genres.
I can see though that u put time an effort into this so good job. There were some cool effects and panning and stuff.
Anyways, I uploaded my first song to Newgrounds. Could you leave me a review? (Track One_RR) in the techno section. It was weird, i had 2 votes of 5 and 2 downloads then i got another download and that person voted a 0 or something. Whats up with that? lol.
Anyways, look foward to hearing ur improvements in the future.