Not horrible, just needs one simple thing to start
I like the way you were able to arrange such a variety of synths together that smoothly on your first effort, which was better than my first effort.
But one thing that would almost instantly make this piece twice as good is even a halfway decent beat. Doesn't even have to be drums, but there's no backbone to the track whatsoever. It really needs something to give it rhythm.
After that work on switching up your melody here and there, or try focusing on a different sound for a few seconds.
I think there's potential here, but right now it just borders on the edge of listenability. Hope this helps!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.