It was okay....
But it was too unstructured. It's like you just threw it together. There was no rhythym and no beat, and no tune at all. And try to include intruments more pleasant to the ear.
I'm sorry for being so negative, don't take it too hard, it's just one song. I suggest you work a little more on or read up on music and composing theory and you'll probably get a lot better at composing your own music.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.