It needs another layer of music. Something more than just melody and drums. I suggest a low synth to play some sort of harmony thing.
This is the style im looking to hear on newgrounds, its completely underground sounding, trippy as hell, i love it.
Something to texture this would be good, cant quite put my finger on what it needs.
Build ups with some chromatic instruments and some reverb mayb sound good in this, then back into that main bassline.
Awesome though man. Keep at it.
I like the fact that is a fast song, but you need to make it sound more original. Make it your own, it sounds like hundreds of other songs on this site.
nice this song is more nice
but do more quallity song's
But a bit hairy and kind of loose feeling. At 00.22 when the melody changes, the last note of the little sequence is slightly off. Move it up or down, to put it into a minor key. And it is kind of obfivous you dont really know about scales or chords, so try mucking around with a piano and some web tutorials for an afternoon.
Keep at it!