never expected to write this much...
anyway, put the chorus FX before the reverb on the FX chain-just experiment with it and see if you like it better. I almost want to say apply a mid and treble boost on the piano but the slightly muffled tone of the keys really serves the imagery in here quite well.
now on to the vision i get...
a father is returning to his quaint home in the countryside, away from the city....he knocks on the door, and see's his (ex) wife in her humble, dirty clothes, with two young children holding on tightly to her dress while staring at their father with large, innocent eyes....the father tries to apologize to his wife but she just scorns at him and says he will never be forgiven. next he tries talking and apologizing to his children but they do not utter a word, the father with a heart filled with blackness starts to cry as the mother shuts the door on his face. The remain portion of the piece shows the father crying on the porch while the young boy stares at him one last time through a window, and the mother comes over with a scornful look and closes the blinds. The greed driven past of the father can never be forgiven. But really what I invision here is two young eyes staring at me, that are so haunting. Haunting, yet so innocent and friendly.
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Perfection in musical form....
beautiful piece BD....no words or criticisms are needed to be given here. Masterful composition excelling in all aspects and touches the heart with every note. Sits excellently with the thematic elements of guilt, which can indeed be worse than a general depression, regret, bitterness, frustration, despair and even the hand of death itself. I'll stop with the poetic bullshit now. Since you were kind enough to leave a great review on one of my songs, i'll try and return the favor, but I will not be able to leave much advice (which can be recieved as a positive!) i also havent reviewed in ages so I might be a bit rusty, excuse moi.
Again, really coherent and flowing moods- I love the contrast of the major and minor feel (which makes the piano and strings carry an airy sadness, rather than the dark sadness that would emit from a mostly minor based progression), strictly keeping the chord progression in line to retain the moods and not straying to far into other emotions (which could ruin the overall tone of the song)- very carefully written. The ending has some underlying feel of hope covered in a thick layer of sad chords, which again, really ties in great with the themes you provided. Construction of the piano was great, nice minimal chord progression to start the piece, afterwards reflected by the melody line, gradually building the harmony and effectively gradually building the emotions. I really liked your left hand arpeggios and their movement, and my favorite part was when the high notes came in-isn't it wondrous how some of the most effective melodies can be carried out by a few simple notes? Lots of variating dynamics, making the piano playing sound quite realisitic (midi recorded?) and showing the emotion is clearly there. Anyways- what I'm trying to get at is you did an oustanding job at composing the parts and stringing them together, not too much was packed into certain parts, the simple rhythmical themes and transitions were really just flawlessly executed. While the last note works for most pieces, resolving back to the lower registers, and ending on that note just feels a bit cliche, and moreso dark, which is really not what this piece needs IMO, but moreso a higher voiced chord that leaves on a bit of a cliffhangerish note, such as a Cmin(7) chord without the fifth and give it a sonorous open voicing (C6-Bb6, Eb7 is what I had in mind)
As for the strings, simply great too. Simple rhythmic themes yet not entirely just sequenced of whole notes, which is a common "mistake" per se. The chords move great, some wonderful voicings that back the piano perfectly. Lots of color is added to the piece, yet it does it's job as an accompaniment with not taking too much of spotlight away from the piano. The high pitched violin sections were excellent too and came in at a suitable time.
I guess from here I really have no criticism on the composition it self- maybe look into developing the string parts more, not that the piece needs it, but voice the chords through the violin 1s, violin2s, violas, and cellos. (add a contrabass for the lower bass ranges although its not needed). Probably have the violin2, viola, and cello build the harmony in the background while the first violin section can carry the melody or countermelody of the piece and play certain motifs when needed. Again, just something to look into!
i almost wish this piece could be longer, but everything built in here does a fine job of serving its purpose. Also, glad that you only included a piano and strings, that's all this piece needs to tell about it's solemn themes.
I dont care, sure no one really does either- but mixing could be better maybe? Not sure if your strings are all in one channel, but if they are not, do a bit more panning to spread them out make the strings sound a bit more realisitic and spaced. I'd put more reverb on them too, so they're more in the background while the piano remains in the front. Some chorus FX might thicken up the sound some too and not sound to synthethic if done carefully
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Wow...This is by far the longest review I have ever recieved. Thank you! I will edit this response to be longer once I have the time, but I don't have time at the moment. I have 30 reviews to respond to and want to save the best for last when I'm not rushed. Besides, I need to go practice the piano before I put it off too long. >_>
*Will be edited soon*
But that doesn't mean it's not an awesome song. It's pretty damn good and I don't usually say that about classical songs.
One of my goals is to draw people into the classical genre. When done right, I believe it is truly amazing. Thank you for this review,
You really expressed sadness in this audio submission here. I also think on a personal note that I might be able to use this in a series that I might have out in about a year or so on newgrounds so if you don't mind I may bookmark this and use it. Of course you get credit and everything. Great job on this song man.
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Go ahead and use it if you'd like. Send me the link if you ever end up finishing it!
Thanks for the review,
this reminds me of the day my grandfather died when i was 3 :"(
I know how the death of family is. All of us are bound to experience it at some point. However, that's life...I'm glad you liked this song.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.