this is my shhhhiiiittttt!!!!
ohhhhhh dis is my shit
Great and could be better at the same time
Honestly the song is hot as fuck, but there are a couple things that we can do better, Verse 1 (Dyse), all he needs to do is swag it out, verse 2 (Aztec), you fucking killed it "CALL ME THE MOTHER FUCKING RHYME MASTER, OR YOSEMIDY SAM, CUZ I AM A GUNBLASTER" that shit is hot as fuck, Verse 3 (J Boi), its cool and laid back, but you should probly rap a little faster on this song, kinda like you do in I Do It Big, then it would really kill kill lol, Verse 4 (D Mike), OMFG this is a hot verse, "BEFORE YOUR MOTHER FUCKIN ASS TAKES A TURN THATS WRONG" all chopped and screwed = hot as fuck, one thing to change, D Mike you say "I'm Illegal like a desert eagle". you should say "I am lethal like a desert eagle" cuz i'm illegal doesnt make sense, cuz desert eagles aren't illegal, only if you are underage. so thats that, Verse 5 (Renegade), well it's hard to criticize myself but i'll try, all in all, this is possibly the worst verse i have ever written, it doesnt stay on topic and i was just nervous cuz there was a lot of shit going on in the room when i was writting and couldn't concentrate, but no excuses, it sucks plain and simple, it's fast but the lyrics suck, verse 6 (Mali Fresh) = Hot but i think you should have used the second half of that verse on that song rather than the first half, you should have started the verse where you say "So where's the punk ass n***a's who say they can't be shot" you know which one i'm talking about it, thats the only way you would have been able to kill it harder than what you already did.
Dam we beastin on dis one
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