it's not bad, better than ultima legion
do what a itold you with the 2 leads and it wont be as muffled, also get rid of the snare.
do what i told you with the snare as well but get rid of the snare you used all together, the kick drums db is too high and needs its frequency altered, as you can hear it is just a bang over the top of the song, sidechain the kick so when it hits the leads db lowers and you'll get a more epic sounding drum. the initial lead at roughly 26 seconds is nice i like it, but notice the snare is drowned out? that's because the frequency of the lead and snare and kick is too close together. changing the frequency of the lead will alter it a little bit so i advise sidehcaining the lead and changing the frequency of the snare and kick
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Phantasmagoria13 
