Not bad at all, but I think it needs some work on it.
The tune after 00:08 sounds not bat at all, but it becomes monotonic. The middle of the song is average too, it needs some work (you should use realistic drumkit in that - it would be awesome for it!). Ending is so average too, but it's better than the middle of the song. I'll give you 4 point and 7 star for that. Keep it up!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.