not good, but not horrible...

this isnt GREAT but its not HORRIBLE either. it shows that you know somewhat what you are doing, i can see you are just learning. Practice makes perfect, and always strive to be better. my music is not that great, but i feel i get better with ever track. dont hold back, dont care what others think, make the music for urself and you will get it.
i think synthkitty said it all pretty much. be more melodic, i find thats always the hardest part. keep it working.
good luck.

Neogma

P.S. check out my new song ~Discoma~ ^-^ hope u enjoy it.

Some advice...

It seems that the biggest problem with this song is the bass that you used as a lead instrument.

1. It's too muddled-- the notes don't come accross very clearly.
2. It has no hooks-- the patterns that it plays aren't catchy, and feel too random.

It might be a good idea to add more bass tones to your drums in there, too. It sounds kind of washed out.

Good luck!